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i need help to proofread this (esl student)


i need help to proofread this (esl student)?
Luxemburg’s point of views are reasonable. Government meant wealthy people with power, people that have nothing to lose, people who would not care about the others. The same story gets repeated when it comes to rulers in power no matter their beliefs , still the more power they get from their position, the more they want to fill themselves with pride. This prides comes along with the wanting of property which is imperialism. They think about themselves instead of “US“ the people of one unique nation. The same happened Bourgeois society, they established a new society in order to “changed” the old regime, the aristocracy and they end up “accommodating” themselves even more than in the previous system of government. The bourgeoisies took advantage of the proletariat by making them work in industries or factories exploiting them to the maximum. But, still the proletariat did not learn from its lesson says Luxemburg, they keep falling in the same trick. When proletarian thought they were finally in peace with the bourgeoisies society. They began to live under a new form of struggled.
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Luxemburg’s point of views are reasonable. Government meant wealthy people with power, people that have nothing to lose, and people who would not care about others. The same story gets repeated when it comes to rulers in power, no matter their beliefs. Still, the more power they get from their position, the more they want to fill themselves with pride. This prides comes along with the wanting of property which is imperialism. They think about themselves as one unique nation instead of "U.S. people. The same happened in Bourgeois society. They established a new society in order to “change” the old regime, the aristocracy and they ended up “accommodating” themselves even more than in the previous system of government. The bourgeoisies took advantage of the proletariat by making them work in industries or factories exploiting them to the maximum. "However, the proletariat did not learn from its lesson," says Luxemburg, "they keep falling in the same trick." When proletarian thought they were finally in peace with the bourgeoisies society, they began to live under a new form of struggled.
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A few suggestions marked in caps. Could be improved further still Luxemburg’s POINTS OF VIEW are reasonable. Government meant wealthy people with power, people that haD nothing to lose, people who would not care about others. The same story IS repeated when it comes to rulers in power IRRESPECTIVE OF THEIR beliefs. THE more power they get from their position, the more ARROGANT THEY BECOME. ALONG WITH pride comes A DESIRE FOR property - imperialism. They think about themselves instead of “US“ the people of one unique nation. The same happened TO Bourgeois society, they established a new society in order to “change” the old regime, the aristocracy, and they endED up “accommodating” themselves even more than HAD THOSE in the previous system of government. The bourgeoisIE took advantage of the proletariat by making them work in industries or factories, exploiting them to the maximum. But, still the proletariat did not learn from their lesson, says Luxemburg. They kept falling FOR the same trick. When proletariaT thought they were finally in HARMONY with the bourgeoisIE, THEY began, IN FACT, to live WITH a new form of struggle.
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There are just a few little errors Points of view would not care about others no matter what their beliefs the wanting of property. This is Imperialism. instead of the United States (you cannot say one unique - since unique already means there is only one) the people of a unique nation. The same thing happened in Bourgeois 'change' the old regime (the Aristocracy) But, still the Proletariat did not learn their lesson, as Luxembourg states. They kept on falling for the same trick. When the Proletariat finally decided that they could live peacefully with the Bourgeois' society, they found they were only beginning a new form of struggle.