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Stalingrad During the 20th Century man had grown so intelligent and greedy that we started the single largest war man has ever witnessed, The Second World War. It killed almost 52 million people and left almost all of Europe destroyed. The single event that sparked it was Hitler’s greed for power and conquest. By 1939 Austria and Czechoslovakia had fallen into his hands and on September 1st 1939 he attacked Poland and then the following year he took France, Belgium, Luxemburg, Holland, Denmark and Norway. Then on June 22 1941 he attacked the Soviet Union. When his entail attack “Operation Babarossa” failed he launched “Fall Blau” witch sparked the largest single battle in history, the Battle of Stalingrad and turned the tied of the war and stopped Hitler from grabbing a hold of the USSR. In the summer of 1941 the German Whermacht was advancing with staggering speed though the Soviet landscape. The German spearhead groups called “Armee Gruppe” advanced and encircled millions of men. (6) By October the Germans reached the outskirts of Moscow, the capital of the Soviet Union. Just as the Germans get ready to encircle the Capital, winter sets in, the temperture drops as much as 30 celsius in a day! By this time the Soviets have lost over 70 million people, 10 million pounds of metal ore, and over 800 million pounds of bread!(8) Still on December 5th Stalin orders an offencive to push back the German army. By Febuary 1942 the Germans hold the front stable but are pushed back ~100 KM from Moscow. When Hitler realized that he could not take Moscow he started planning the next major offencive for 1942. By the time the Germans stoped the offencive for the winter Hitler had the final bugs worked out. (10) When Hitler tells his generals they are outraged and think that an offence on Moscow would throw the Soviets into cival war and the would give up soon after. Hitler strongly disagrees with this and thinks that he will pay too many casualties for not a large reward. The plan for “Fall Blau” called for “Heeresgruppe Sud” to use the doctrian of Blitzkried (or lighting war) to overrun Soviet possitons and reach the cities of Buka and Stalingrad. Buka was an extremely important position because it produced over 50 percent of the soviet oil and the Germans by this time realzed that they would need more and more oil to support their Panzer devisons. In the middle of July the German armies advanced, as the 6th and 4th panzer armies established positions on the Don, at the same time Italian, Hungarian and Romanian armies occupied the baches to provent the soviets from counter attacking. Mean while the German 17th army advanced into the caussacs along with the 1st Panzer army. (10) By October of 1942 the Hungarian, Romania and Italian expedisanry forces were holding the Don from a possible Soviet counter attack, the German 6th army had entered Stalingrad and elements of the 4th panzer army where ordered to hold the line and never to leave Stalingrad. When Hitler sees how well the 4th and 6th armies are doing he orders elements of the 4th panzer army to move down to the south to support the German offencive. A week later for a strange reson Hitler takes personal command of “Heeresgruppe Sud” and splits it up into two different blocks called, “Herresgruppe Sud-A and Sud-B” This way he belives that the units will be more mobile and will be able to stike from different directions. Soon he thinks his plan is working so e pulls back the whole 4th panzerarmy to the north in to Stalingrad while the Romania and Italian troops cover the flanks. Hitler, by this time, thinks his operation is a great succsess and takes the Soviets by surprise. He blives that its impossible for the Soviets to launch an offencive, but he is wrong. He did not know the Soviets seacret wepon, massive reserve troops. Stalin calls down over 100 Divisons from all over the Soviet Union, from Moscow, to the Far East defence force. This sets motion to the great battle of Stalingrad. As the small isolated pocets hold Stalingrad the German airforce attacks almost every building in the city down to the ground. The Russians hold out fiersly and try offencive opparation to break though the small pockets but they don’t know the truble brewing to the north of them.
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Two words. Spell check.
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During the 20th Century a man had grown so intelligent and greedy that we started the single largest war man has ever witnessed, The Second World War. It killed almost 52 million people and left almost all of Europe destroyed. The single event that sparked it was Hitler’s greed for power and conquest. By 1939 Austria and Czechoslovakia had fallen into his hands and on September 1st 1939 he attacked Poland and then the following year he took France, Belgium, Luxemburg, Holland, Denmark and Norway. Then on June 22 1941 he attacked the Soviet Union. When his entail attack “Operation Babarossa” failed he launched “Fall Blau” witch sparked the largest single battle in history, the Battle of Stalingrad and turned the tied of the war and stopped Hitler from grabbing a hold of the USSR. In the summer of 1941 the German Whermacht was advancing with staggering speed though the Soviet landscape. The German spearhead groups called “Armee Gruppe” advanced and encircled millions of men. (6) By October the Germans reached the outskirts of Moscow, the capital of the Soviet Union. Just as the Germans get ready to encircle the Capital, winter sets in; the temperature drops as much as 30 Celsius in a day! By this time the Soviets have lost over 70 million people, 10 million pounds of metal ore, and over 800 million pounds of bread!(8) Still on December 5th Stalin orders an offensive to push back the German army. By February 1942 the Germans hold the front stable but are pushed back ~100 KM from Moscow. When Hitler realized that he could not take Moscow he started planning the next major offensive for 1942. By the time the Germans stopped the offensive for the winter Hitler had the final bugs worked out. (10) When Hitler tells his generals that they are outraged and think that an offence on Moscow would throw the Soviets into civil war and they would give up soon after. Hitler strongly disagrees with this and thinks that he will pay too many casualties for not a large reward. The plan for “Fall Blau” called for “Heeresgruppe Sud” to use the doctrine of Blitzkrieg (or lighting war) to overrun Soviet positions and reach the cities of Buka and Stalingrad. Buka was an extremely important position because it produced over 50 percent of the soviet oil and the Germans by this time realized that they would need more and more oil to support their Panzer divisions. In the middle of July the German armies advanced, as the 6th and 4th panzer armies established positions on the Don, at the same time Italian, Hungarian and Romanian armies occupied the batches to prevent the soviets from counter attacking. Mean while the German 17th army advanced into the causes along with the 1st Panzer army. (10) By October of 1942 the Hungarian, Romania and Italian ((expedisanry)) forces were holding the Don from a possible Soviet counter attack, the German 6th army had entered Stalingrad and elements of the 4th panzer army where ordered to hold the line and never to leave Stalingrad. When Hitler sees how well the 4th and 6th armies are doing he orders elements of the 4th panzer army to move down to the south to support the German offensive. A week later for a strange reason Hitler takes personal command of “Heeresgruppe Sud” and splits it up into two different blocks called, “Herresgruppe Sud-A and Sud-B” This way he believes that the units will be more mobile and will be able to strike from different directions. Soon he thinks his plan is working so e pulls back the whole 4th panzer army to the north in to Stalingrad while the Romania and Italian troops cover the flanks. Hitler, by this time, thinks his operation is a great success and takes the Soviets by surprise. He believes that it’s impossible for the Soviets to launch an offensive, but he is wrong. He did not know the Soviets secret weapon, massive reserve troops. Stalin calls down over 100 Divisions from all over the Soviet Union, from Moscow, to the Far East defense force. This sets motion to the great battle of Stalingrad. As the small isolated pockets hold Stalingrad the German air force attacks almost every building in the city down to the ground. The Russians hold out fiercely and try offensive operation to break though the small pockets but they don’t know the trouble brewing to the north of them.
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um to start off in your first sentence you have the subject man so instead of we you need to change that to "he" is your referring to man as a species. Otherwise change man to society.
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u forgot to skip 3 spaces.....wow
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It killed almost 52 million people and left almost all of Europe destroyed. "It took nearly 52 million lives and left just about all of Europe demolished" would be better. When his entail attack “Operation Babarossa” failed he launched “Fall Blau” witch sparked the largest single battle in history, the Battle of Stalingrad and turned the tied of the war and stopped Hitler from grabbing a hold of the USSR. Tied should be tide winter sets in, the t... "in, the" should be "in; the" not take Moscow he started planning the next major offencive for 1942. offencive should be offensive NOTE: there are prolly many more mistakes that i didn't find; i didn't read even the first half. But a good idea is to expand your language. Use the thesaurus in Microsoft Word.
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During the 20th Century man had grown so intelligent and greedy that we started the single largest war man has ever witnessed, The Second World War. Almost 52 million people were killed during the war and almost all of Europe was destroyed. The single event that sparked the war was Hitler’s greed for power and conquest. By 1939 Austria and Czechoslovakia had fallen to Hitler, and on September 1st 1939 he attacked Poland. The following year he took France, Belgium, Luxemburg, Holland, Denmark and Norway. Then, on June 22, 1941 Hitler attacked the Soviet Union. When the initial attack “Operation Babarossa” failed, he launched “Fall Blau” which sparked the largest single battle in history, the Battle of Stalingrad, and turned the tide of the war and stopped Hitler from grabbing a hold of the USSR. In the summer of 1941, the German Whermacht was advancing with staggering speed across the Soviet landscape. The German spearhead group “Armee Gruppe” advanced and encircled millions of men. (6) By October, the Germans reached the outskirts of Moscow, the capital of the Soviet Union. Just as the Germans readied to encircle the Capital, winter set in, the temperture droped as much as 30 celsius in one day. By this time, the Soviets had lost over 70 million people, 10 million pounds of metal ore, and over 800 million pounds of bread!(8) Still, on December 5th Stalin ordered an offensive to push back the German army. By February 1942, the Germans held the front stable but were then pushed back ~100 KM from Moscow. When Hitler realized he could not take Moscow he started planning the next major offensive for 1942. By the time the Germans stoped the offensive for the winter, Hitler had the final bugs worked out. (10) Hitler told his generals and they weree outraged and thought that an offense on Moscow would throw the Soviets into civil war and the would give up soon after. Hitler strongly disagreed with this and thought he will pay too many casualties for not a large reward. The plan for “Fall Blau” called for “Heeresgruppe Sud” to use the doctrian of Blitzkried (or lighting war) to overrun Soviet positions and reach the cities of Buka and Stalingrad. Buka was an extremely important position because it produced over 50 percent of the soviet oil and the Germans by this time realized that they would need more and more oil to support their Panzer devisons. In the middle of July, the German armies advanced. As the 6th and 4th panzer armies established positions on the Don, the Italian, Hungarian and Romanian armies occupied the baches to prevent the soviets from counter attacking. Meanwhile, the German 17th army advanced into the caussacs along with the 1st Panzer army. (10) By October of 1942, the Hungarian, Romania, and Italian expedisanry forces were holding the Don from a possible Soviet counter attack, the German 6th army had entered Stalingrad and elements of the 4th panzer army where ordered to hold the line and never to leave Stalingrad. When Hitler saw how well the 4th and 6th armies were doing he ordered elements of the 4th panzer army to move down to the south to support the German offencive. A week later, for a strange reason, Hitler took personal command of “Heeresgruppe Sud” and split it up into two different blocks called, “Herresgruppe Sud-A and Sud-B” This way, he believes, the units will be more mobile and will be able to stike from different directions. Soon, he thought his plan was working so he pulled back the whole 4th panzerarmy to the north in to Stalingrad while the Romania and Italian troops cover the flanks. Hitler, by this time, thought his operation was a great success and took the Soviets by surprise. He believes that its impossible for the Soviets to launch an offensive, but he is wrong. He did not know the Soviets secret weapon, massive reserve troops. Stalin called down over 100 Divisons from all over the Soviet Union, from Moscow, to the Far East defense force. This set in motion the great battle of Stalingrad. As the small isolated pockets hold Stalingrad, the German airforce attacks almost every building in the city down to the ground. The Russians hold out fiercly and try offensive operation to break though the small pockets but they didn't know the trouble brewing to the north of them. Well, I fixed a lot of your comma errors and spelling, but you need to run spell check. You have a problem staying in the same tense--you keep switching from past to present--so you need to make sure there is agreement throughout your paper.
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Edited for spelling and grammar, but not content...you might want to check the spelling of the German words online. Also, I wasn't sure what you meant by caussacs... Stalingrad During the 20th century, man had grown so intelligent and greedy that we started the single largest war that man has ever witnessed; the Second World War. It killed almost 52 million people and left most of Europe destroyed. The single event that sparked it was Hitler’s greed for power and conquest. By 1939, Austria and Czechoslovakia had fallen into his hands and on September 1, 1939, he attacked Poland and then took France, Belgium, Luxemburg, Holland, Denmark and Norway the following year. On June 22, 1941, he attacked the Soviet Union. When his attack, “Operation Babarossa,” failed, he launched “Fall Blau” which sparked the largest single battle in history - the Battle of Stalingrad - and turned the tide of the war and stopped Hitler from grabbing a hold of the USSR. In the summer of 1941, the German Whermacht was advancing with staggering speed though the Soviet landscape. The German spearhead groups called “Armee Gruppe” advanced and encircled millions of men. (6) By October, the Germans reached the outskirts of Moscow, the capital of the Soviet Union. Just as the Germans were ready to encircle the Capital, winter set in; the temperature dropped as much as 30 Celsius in a day! By this time, the Soviets had lost over 70 million people, 10 million pounds of metal ore, and over 800 million pounds of bread!(8) Still, on December 5th, Stalin ordered an offensive to push back the German army. By February, 1942, the Germans held the front stable but are pushed back ~100 KM from Moscow. When Hitler realized that he could not take Moscow, he started planning the next major offensive for 1942. By the time the Germans stopped the offensive for the winter, Hitler had the final bugs worked out. (10) When Hitler told his generals, they were outraged and thought that an offense on Moscow would throw the Soviets into civil war and that they would give up soon after. Hitler strongly disagreed with this and thought that it would cost too many casualties for a small reward. The plan for “Fall Blau” called for “Heeresgruppe Sud” to use the doctrine of Blitzkrieg (or lighting war) to overrun Soviet positions and reach the cities of Buka and Stalingrad. Buka was an extremely important position because it produced over 50 percent of the Soviet oil, and the Germans realized that they would need more and more oil to support their Panzer divisions. In the middle of July, the German armies advanced. While the 6th and 4th panzer armies established positions on the Don, Italian, Hungarian and Romanian armies occupied the beaches to prevent the Soviets from counter-attacking. Meanwhile the German 17th army advanced into the caussacs along with the 1st Panzer army. (10) By October of 1942, the Hungarian, Romanian and Italian expeditionary forces were holding the Don from a possible Soviet counter attack, the German 6th army had entered Stalingrad and elements of the 4th panzer army were ordered to hold the line and to never leave Stalingrad. When Hitler saw how well the 4th and 6th armies were doing, he orders elements of the 4th panzer army to move down to the South to support the German offensive. A week later, for some strange reason, Hitler takes personal command of “Heeresgruppe Sud” and splits it into two different blocks called “Herresgruppe Sud-A and Sud-B. He believed that the units would be more mobile and would be able to stake from different directions. Soon, he thinks his plan is working, so he pulls back the whole 4th panzer army to the north into Stalingrad, while the Romanian and Italian troops cover the flanks. By this time, Hitler thinks his operation is a great success and takes the Soviets by surprise. He believes that it is impossible for the Soviets to launch an offensive, but he is wrong. He does not know the Soviets secret weapon - massive reserve troops. Stalin calls down over 100 divisions from all over the Soviet Union, from Moscow to the Far East defense force. This sets in motion the great battle of Stalingrad. As the small isolated pockets hold Stalingrad, the German air force bombs almost every building in the city down to the ground. The Russians hold out fiercely and try offensive operations to break through the small pockets, but they don’t know that trouble is brewing to the north of them.
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It's hard to say that Barbarossa was a failure. Stalingrad was also not the single largest battle in history. Stalingrad was, however, a turning point of the war. The largest battle in history was Kursk (1943). Kursk was the decisive turning point of the war, meaning that the Germans would NEVER launch another offensive after that.